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The Power of DescriptionGood writing depends to a great extent on good description. Description is the essence of showing and not telling. The goal of description is to change vague, indefinite writing into lively, image-filled writing that helps capture your reader's interest and makes your meaning clear. Compare the following sentences:
Here are some techniques of description you can use to be more descriptive in your writing: NAMING/ USE EXACT NAMES
USE LIVELY VERBS
USE DESCRIPTIVE MODIFIERS--ADJECTIVES & ADVERBS
USE THE SENSES-- sight, hearing, taste, smell, and touch
Here is an example of sounds being incorporated into a description: Sure signs of the new day are the sounds in the kitchen as breakfast is prepared. The high sigh of the gas just before it whooshes into flame and settles into a whispering hum blends with the gurgling of the water for the morning coffee. Soon the gloop, gloop, gloop of the coffee sets up a perky beat. Then in mingles the crackle of creamy butter on a hot skillet and the shush of an egg as it meets this fiery foe. Ribbons of bacon start to sizzle in the spitting grease. The soft rustle of plastic as bread is removed from its wrapper floats on the air and seems to form part of the atmosphere. The can opener whirs, and the orange juice concentrate drops with a splat into the blender, which whizzes together the orange cylinder and splashed-in water. For minutes after the blender stops, tiny effervescing bubbles fizz. USE COMPARISONS Whereas naming and detailing call on the power of observation, comparing brings the imagination into play. Comparison makes language even more precise and description more evocative. There are two types of comparisons: similes and metaphors. A simile is a comparison using either like or as to directly express a similarity. A metaphor, on the other hand, is an implicit comparison by which one thing is described as though it were the other. Look at this passage: He was ten inches long, thin as a curve, a muscled ribbon, brown as fruitwood, soft-furred, alert. His face was fierce, small and pointed as a lizard's; he would have made a good arrowhead. There was just a dot of chin, maybe two brown hairs' worth, and then the pure white fur began that spread down his underside. He had two black eyes I didn't see, any more than you see a window. simile: "thin as a curve" | metaphor: "a muscled ribbon" SHOWING and NOT TELLING the essence of description Another way to think of describing is to seek "to show and not tell." By showing with our descriptions, we as writers are allowing our readers to make up their minds about what they "see" in our description. Showing is much more detailed and specific and depends on close observation. Like sketching the negative space in a drawing, as you "show," the thing you are describing comes into greater focus. For instance, I could "tell" you "it is a beautiful day"; however, I could express that the day was beautiful in a far more pleasing way by "showing" you the details of this beautiful day--the sun glistening on the pond, the light breeze, the cool temperature, the clear blue sky, the sounds of kids playing. ACTIVITY Examples: Single sentence opening
Try to look for "doors" inside your own text
(nouns, verbs, telling sentences) which you can open up with description
using the techniques covered here. --View this supplementary video to this guide. |
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